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[Garage]

i want to get out of here.
but there is nowhere to go.
i want people to care.
but everyone keeps telling me no.

i am sitting alone in the dark.
the clock is ticking slow.
my whole life is a question mark.
a failure came to this world sixteen years ago

but i dont care about you either.
i dont care about your lives.
i dont care about your money.
or your educated wives.

i dont believe in your endless love.
i dont believe in your messed up shit.
i dont believe in your god above.
you got a brain, now use it.

[Haarfagr]

Likte siste-delen, "I don't care" osv. Klinger bra, kult budskap!

[kidCha0s]

but i dont care about you either.
i dont care about your lives.
i dont care about your money.
or your educated wives.

^kicker ass bra

den her linja syns jeg var litt rar; I dont care about your messed up shit.
- synes ikke den fungerte helt med alt det andre, hvilken shit?

hva slags musikk er det?

Endret Mars 18, 2013 av kidCha0s